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And it keeps on raining
Walls are falling
Light is waning
Hearts are crumbling
And their fingers fumble gracelessly
With their buttons, zippers, jacket pockets
Nervous, they just want to see
The girl who said she could fly

As it keeps on raining
Her knees are bent
And their necks are craning
As the levee breaks

And the sky is graying
Curtains closing
On the dozing
People who're too blind to see
The crowd outside their windows
Dressed in black already, or so it seems
They'll surely want their money back
Unless someone starts this blasted act

The girl who said she could fly

As the sky keeps graying
She's poised and ready
As they hold steady
Their gaze upon her
And the levee breaks
©2006-2009 ~MoonShadowDemon
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(full title: The Girl Who Said She Could Fly (because DevArt decided the 'y' on Fly is one letter too long of a title))

This piece is rather old - from last year, actually, should my recollection serve me right.
I got the idea for this when I was listening to When The Levee Breaks, by A Perfect Circle (their Emotive album), hence the title is smuggled into the poem *IADMITITOKAY!*.

As always: comment on what you think it means/how it makes you feel/how I can improve.

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:iconjeannie64:
yes do like how you structured this piece good work keep it up jx

--
life is like a bowl of jelly it takes little to upset the balance

~jeannie64
:iconfostic-popcorn:
Seeing as I can't write poetry worth a damn, or read and appreciate anything much past Dr Seuss, my comments probably won't be helpful, but eh. xD

In any case, I like the "flow" (Or the opposite of "flow"? Anti-flow?) of your poetry. It creates something fast-paced and interesting to read! I also really like your imagery in here. ^^

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